Band 9 model answer
Surveillance technology has proliferated across modern cities, prompting debate about whether the security it provides justifies the erosion of personal privacy. Having weighed both positions, I believe that carefully regulated surveillance is, on balance, beneficial.
Proponents of public cameras emphasise their contribution to safety. The mere presence of CCTV can deter would-be offenders, who are less likely to commit theft or assault when they know they are being recorded. Should a crime nonetheless occur, footage provides invaluable evidence that helps police identify suspects and secure convictions. For victims, this can mean the difference between justice and impunity, which explains why many citizens welcome cameras in stations, car parks and shopping centres.
Those who object, however, raise legitimate concerns about privacy. Constant monitoring can make ordinary people feel as though they are perpetually under suspicion, and there is a genuine risk that recorded data could be misused, leaked or exploited by authorities for purposes far beyond crime prevention. In societies lacking strong legal safeguards, pervasive surveillance may even become a tool of political control.
In my view, the solution lies not in abandoning surveillance but in governing it responsibly. Cameras should be confined to genuinely public spaces, footage should be stored securely and deleted promptly, and independent oversight should prevent abuse. Under such conditions, the safety benefits clearly outweigh the drawbacks.
In conclusion, although surveillance inevitably intrudes upon privacy to some degree, its capacity to deter crime and assist justice makes it worthwhile, provided that robust regulations keep its use firmly in check.
Examiner’s notes
- Balances both views fairly and arrives at a nuanced opinion that depends on regulation, which lifts Task Response.
- Cohesive devices are embedded smoothly (on balance, nonetheless, provided that) instead of being signposted crudely.
- Precise vocabulary signals a high band: proliferated, impunity, pervasive surveillance, independent oversight.