Band 9 model answer
As the climate crisis intensifies, debate continues over where responsibility for environmental protection truly lies: with ordinary citizens or with the state. While individual effort matters, I believe meaningful progress depends primarily on decisive government action.
Those who stress personal responsibility argue that collective change begins with individual choices. When millions of people recycle, reduce meat consumption or switch to public transport, the cumulative effect on emissions and waste is substantial. This view also empowers citizens, reminding them that environmental decline is not someone else's problem and that everyday habits genuinely count.
Nevertheless, I find the opposing argument more persuasive. The scale of challenges such as global warming, deforestation and ocean pollution far exceeds what voluntary individual behaviour can address. Only governments possess the legislative and financial tools to impose binding emissions targets, fund renewable infrastructure and regulate the industries responsible for the bulk of pollution. Without coordinated policy, even the most conscientious consumer is powerless against systemic forces, and the burden is unfairly shifted onto individuals while corporations continue largely unchecked.
In my opinion, the two are not mutually exclusive, but the lead must come from above. Robust regulation creates the framework within which individual choices become effective, for instance by making clean energy affordable and sustainable options the default.
In conclusion, although personal action is valuable and should be encouraged, the magnitude of environmental problems demands government intervention. Lasting solutions will be achieved only when ambitious public policy enables and amplifies the efforts of individuals.
Examiner’s notes
- Both positions are explored before a clear, defensible opinion ('the lead must come from above') is reached and maintained.
- Cohesion is fluent and unobtrusive ('Nevertheless', 'for instance', 'In my opinion'), never mechanical.
- Precise environmental lexis: binding emissions targets, renewable infrastructure, systemic, conscientious.