Band 9 model answer
Advertising saturates modern life, from billboards and television to the endless feeds of social media. Critics contend that it manipulates people into buying goods they neither need nor can afford, and ought to be reined in. I broadly agree that tighter regulation is justified, though an outright clampdown would be excessive.
There is compelling evidence that advertising actively fuels needless consumption. By cleverly associating products with happiness, status and belonging, marketers create artificial desires, persuading ordinary consumers that lasting contentment lies in the very next purchase. This is most troubling when it deliberately targets the impressionable, such as young children who pester their parents for the latest toy, or vulnerable adults lured into spiralling debt by glamorous credit offers. The cumulative effect is a damaging culture of overspending and waste that harms both household finances and the wider environment alike.
For these reasons, I support stricter controls in specific areas. Governments could rightly ban advertising aimed at young children, demand honesty in claims and curb the promotion of harmful goods such as gambling or junk food. Such measures protect the susceptible without infringing the legitimate freedom of businesses to inform the public about genuine products.
Nevertheless, I stop short of endorsing sweeping restrictions, because advertising also serves useful functions. It conveys real information about new and better products, sustains competition that drives down prices, and funds free media and online services that society values. A blanket suppression would therefore do more harm than good. In conclusion, while advertising undeniably stokes unnecessary consumption and warrants targeted regulation, particularly to shield the vulnerable, it should be moderated rather than muzzled.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the writer adopts a precise, qualified position ('broadly agree... though an outright clampdown would be excessive') and defends it consistently to the conclusion.
- Coherence and cohesion: the argument advances logically from problem to proposed controls to a counter-balancing limit, signposted by 'For these reasons' and 'Nevertheless'.
- Lexical resource: evocative collocations such as 'create artificial desires', 'stokes unnecessary consumption' and 'moderated rather than muzzled' show flair and precision.