Band 9 model answer
As workforces age and technology advances rapidly, the treatment of older employees has become a contentious issue. While some regard their declining job prospects as a natural consequence of economic change, I am convinced that much of this disadvantage amounts to unjustified discrimination.
Those who view the trend as inevitable point to the relentless pace of technological change. Industries are restructured, digital skills become essential almost overnight, and workers trained decades ago may struggle to adapt. From this standpoint, the difficulties older employees face reflect a mismatch between their experience and current demands rather than any prejudice, and economies must prioritise efficiency to remain competitive.
There is partial truth here, yet the discrimination argument is far more persuasive. Many older workers are perfectly capable of acquiring new skills, but are never given the chance because recruiters quietly assume they are inflexible, costly, or close to retirement. Such assumptions are rarely tested against evidence; indeed, experienced staff often bring reliability, judgement, and mentoring abilities that younger colleagues cannot match. When a competent applicant is rejected on the basis of age alone, this is plainly unfair, not an economic necessity.
In my judgement, while economic change creates real pressures, it is frequently used as a convenient excuse to mask prejudice. The appropriate response is to enforce age-discrimination laws robustly and to invest in lifelong retraining, ensuring that experience is valued rather than discarded. A society that carelessly writes off its older members not only commits a clear injustice but also wastes a vast reservoir of skill at the very moment when populations are ageing and such talent is increasingly needed.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the writer engages both views fairly, concedes 'partial truth' to the opposing side, then defends a clear personal opinion that ageism is largely discrimination dressed as economics.
- Coherence: contrast is managed with precision ('There is partial truth here, yet'), guiding the reader through a genuine evaluation rather than a flat comparison.
- Lexical resource: idiomatic and evaluative phrases such as 'writes off its older members' and 'a vast reservoir of skill' lift the register while remaining wholly appropriate.