Band 9 model answer
In countless metropolitan centres, the air has grown dangerously toxic, threatening the health of millions. This essay will examine the principal causes of urban air pollution before proposing a set of practical remedies.
The dominant cause is undoubtedly road transport. As cities swell, the sheer number of petrol and diesel vehicles crawling through congested streets releases enormous quantities of nitrogen oxides and particulate matter. Industrial activity compounds the problem, with factories and power stations belching pollutants into the urban atmosphere. In many developing nations, the continued burning of coal and biomass for heating and cooking adds a further layer of contamination that lingers over densely built environments.
Fortunately, a range of effective measures exists. The most impactful is to overhaul urban transport: governments should invest heavily in clean, affordable public transit, expand cycling networks and phase out combustion engines in favour of electric vehicles. Introducing low-emission zones, where the most polluting vehicles are barred or charged, has already proven successful in cities such as London. Beyond transport, tightening industrial regulations and relocating heavy plants away from residential districts would substantially reduce ambient toxicity.
In conclusion, urban air pollution stems chiefly from traffic and industry, but it is far from intractable. Through a combination of greener transport, stricter regulation and sustained political will, cities can reclaim breathable air and protect the wellbeing of their inhabitants. The technology already exists; what remains is the determination to deploy it.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the two-part causes-and-solutions question is answered in full, with one paragraph dedicated to each element and solutions logically mirroring the causes identified.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the introduction previews the structure ('examine the principal causes... before proposing... remedies') and body paragraphs follow that roadmap, aiding navigation.
- Lexical Resource: precise environmental vocabulary including 'particulate matter', 'low-emission zones', 'ambient toxicity' and 'belching pollutants' demonstrates Band 9 lexis.