Band 9 model answer
Few scientific practices divide public opinion as sharply or as bitterly as the use of animals in medical experiments. Supporters defend the practice as a regrettable but unavoidable necessity, whereas opponents condemn it outright as needless cruelty. Having weighed both arguments carefully, I believe such testing remains justifiable only under very strict conditions.
Proponents emphasise, with considerable force, that countless modern treatments owe their very existence to animal research. Vaccines, insulin and a host of life-saving surgical techniques were all painstakingly refined through experiments that simply could not ethically have been conducted on human beings first. From this perspective, abandoning the practice entirely would stall vital medical progress and, ultimately, cost human lives, a price its advocates understandably deem wholly unacceptable.
Opponents, however, advance an equally powerful moral counterargument. Animals are sentient creatures, plainly capable of suffering, and subjecting them to pain purely for our own benefit is, they contend, a form of exploitation that no scientific goal can ever fully excuse. They further point out that physiological differences between species often render the results unreliable, meaning that animals may endure prolonged agony for findings that ultimately fail to translate to people at all.
My own position deliberately seeks a principled middle ground between these poles. Where no viable alternative exists and the potential to relieve serious human suffering is genuine, carefully regulated animal research can, I believe, be defended. However, this must be coupled with an unwavering commitment to minimising distress and to developing humane substitutes such as sophisticated computer modelling and cultured human tissue. As these alternatives steadily mature, the moral case for experimentation will weaken, and we should strive relentlessly to render it obsolete.
Examiner’s notes
- Both views are presented with equal depth and a qualified opinion ('justifiable only under very strict conditions') is sustained, meeting the discuss-both-views requirement.
- Cohesion relies on contrast and reference ('Proponents', 'Opponents, however', 'My own position') giving a clear argumentative architecture.
- Lexis is accurate and evaluative: 'sentient creatures', 'a regrettable but unavoidable necessity' and 'render it obsolete' convey nuance with idiomatic control.