Band 9 model answer
The rapid sophistication of artificial intelligence has revived a deep-seated and very old anxiety: that intelligent machines will soon render human labour redundant on a massive and irreversible scale. While I readily accept that AI will profoundly reshape the world of employment, I disagree with the claim that it is destined to produce permanent, widespread unemployment.
Those who confidently foresee mass joblessness do have legitimate grounds for concern. Automation is no longer narrowly confined to repetitive manual tasks; sophisticated algorithms now draft documents, diagnose illnesses and analyse complex legal contracts, steadily encroaching on professions that were once thought entirely immune. As such systems grow ever cheaper and more capable, many employers will understandably favour them over costly human workers, potentially displacing labour faster than any previous technological wave.
However, this gloomy forecast conveniently overlooks the consistent historical pattern of technological change. Every major innovation, from the printing press to the personal computer, has eliminated certain occupations while simultaneously creating others that were previously unimaginable. AI is already generating fresh demand for data specialists, ethicists and engineers, and by relieving people of tedious drudgery it frees them for tasks requiring creativity, empathy and nuanced judgement, precisely the qualities that machines still emulate so poorly.
In my considered assessment, the genuine danger is not the wholesale disappearance of work but rather a difficult and uneven transition. Without deliberate investment in retraining and education, those whose roles vanish may struggle to acquire the very skills that the new economy rewards, deepening inequality in the short term. The sensible solution, therefore, lies not in futilely resisting AI but in actively preparing the workforce to collaborate with it productively.
Examiner’s notes
- The essay takes a clear, partial position on the 'to what extent' prompt — accepting disruption but disagreeing with mass unemployment — and defends it consistently.
- Cohesion is fluent and cohesive devices are unobtrusive: 'However, this gloomy forecast', 'In my considered assessment' and 'therefore' guide the reader effortlessly.
- Strong lexical range with 'encroaching on professions', 'relieving people of tedious drudgery' and 'uneven transition' showing precise, natural collocation.