Band 9 model answer
Although contemporary life offers unprecedented comfort and convenience, a striking number of people feel more anxious than their grandparents ever did. This essay will identify the chief drivers of modern stress before recommending realistic remedies that individuals and institutions could adopt together.
The most significant cause is the relentless pace and connectivity of working life. Smartphones and email have blurred the boundary between the office and the home, so employees feel obliged to remain available around the clock and never fully switch off, even at weekends. A second factor is financial insecurity: soaring housing costs, mounting debt and unstable employment leave many people in a state of constant worry about money. Added to this is the pressure of social media, where a stream of curated, idealised lives fuels comparison and inadequacy. Together, these forces create a nagging sense that one can never do enough, breeding chronic tension that the human body was simply not designed to sustain.
Fortunately, both individuals and institutions can ease this burden. On a personal level, people can protect their wellbeing by setting firm limits on screen time, exercising regularly and prioritising sleep, all of which are proven to lower cortisol levels. Employers, meanwhile, bear genuine responsibility: by guaranteeing reasonable hours, discouraging out-of-hours messages and offering flexible arrangements, they allow staff the chance to recover properly. Governments can reinforce these efforts by strengthening job protection and tackling the housing crisis, thereby removing a major source of anxiety at its root rather than merely treating its symptoms.
In conclusion, modern stress arises chiefly from overwork, perpetual connectivity, social comparison and economic uncertainty. Yet it is by no means inevitable. A combination of healthier personal habits and more humane policies from employers and the state could restore a sense of balance and substantially improve public wellbeing.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the answer separates causes from solutions and develops each with extended reasoning, fully satisfying the two-part question.
- Coherence: paragraphs progress logically from individual to institutional remedies, signalled by 'On a personal level' and 'Employers, meanwhile'.
- Grammatical Range: confident use of non-finite clauses ('breeding chronic tension', 'thereby removing a major source') adds density without error.