Band 9 model answer
Television remains one of the most widely consumed media in the world despite the relentless rise of digital alternatives, and its critics maintain that its negative effects comfortably eclipse its merits. I disagree with this sweeping verdict, believing that television's harms, though genuine, are decisively outweighed by its considerable benefits.
The case against television is admittedly not without substance. Excessive viewing fosters a sedentary lifestyle that demonstrably contributes to obesity and related illnesses, while a relentless diet of gratuitous violence and trivial reality programming can desensitise audiences and steadily erode their attention spans. Moreover, commercial channels frequently pursue ratings ahead of substance, flooding the schedules with shallow, formulaic entertainment that crowds out more enriching pursuits such as reading, conversation or outdoor activity.
Nevertheless, these criticisms describe the misuse of television rather than the medium itself. At its considerable best, television is an extraordinary educator and unifier. Thoughtful documentaries illuminate science, history and distant cultures for vast audiences who would otherwise never encounter them, and reliable news broadcasts keep ordinary citizens informed about the events that directly shape their lives. Television also forges genuinely shared experiences, from major sporting tournaments to landmark national broadcasts, binding scattered communities together in a way that few other media can rival. These constructive functions persist regardless of the medium's commercial excesses.
In conclusion, while irresponsible viewing habits and low-quality programming undeniably cause real harm, television's remarkable capacity to educate, inform and unite ultimately renders it a clear net benefit to society. The sensible remedy surely lies not in condemning the medium outright as some critics demand, but rather in choosing far more wisely and selectively what we actually choose to watch.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a clear position ('I disagree') is announced early and maintained, with the harms acknowledged but convincingly subordinated to the benefits.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the pivotal sentence 'these criticisms describe the misuse of television rather than the medium itself' bridges the two body paragraphs and frames the whole argument coherently.
- Lexical Resource: precise and varied expressions such as 'sedentary lifestyle', 'desensitise' and 'shared experiences' show controlled lexical sophistication.