Band 9 model answer
Governments across the world allocate considerable sums to support their farmers, a policy some regard as a misuse of public funds. While I acknowledge that subsidies can be poorly designed, I disagree with the view that the money is fundamentally wasted, because well-targeted support serves vital national interests.
Those who oppose subsidies make understandable points. They argue that propping up agriculture distorts markets, allowing inefficient farms to survive when the funds could instead bolster healthcare, education or infrastructure. Critics also note that, in practice, much of this money flows to large agribusinesses rather than the struggling smallholders it is meant to protect. Viewed this way, subsidies can appear regressive and economically irrational.
Nevertheless, the case for supporting farmers remains strong. Agriculture is uniquely exposed to forces beyond a farmer's control, such as drought, disease and volatile prices, so without a safety net many would abandon the land, jeopardising a nation's food security. Subsidies can also be harnessed for the public good, rewarding farmers who protect biodiversity, conserve water or reduce emissions. In this sense, the money is not a handout but an investment in stable food supplies and a healthy environment.
In conclusion, although I accept that subsidies are sometimes distributed unfairly and ought to be reformed, I disagree that the spending is inherently misguided. Provided support is redirected towards genuine need and sustainable practices, it constitutes a sound use of public money that safeguards both the countryside and the food on which every citizen depends.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the writer states a qualified disagreement and sustains it, conceding the opposing view before rebutting it, which directly answers 'to what extent do you agree or disagree'.
- Cohesion: the pivot from concession to argument is handled by 'Nevertheless', and referencing such as 'the funds' and 'this money' maintains lexical cohesion across paragraphs.
- Lexical resource: economic vocabulary including 'distorts markets', 'regressive' and 'safety net' is deployed accurately and naturally, a hallmark of Band 9.