Band 9 model answer
As diet-related illness becomes a leading public-health concern, debate has grown over whether the state should rein in the food industry or leave dietary decisions to individuals. This essay will consider both perspectives before concluding that targeted regulation is justified.
Those favouring intervention argue that the market alone cannot protect public health. Food companies are driven by profit and routinely promote products that are addictively sweet or fatty, often to vulnerable children. Without rules, they contend, manufacturers will conceal harmful ingredients and flood the media with manipulative advertising. Measures such as sugar taxes, clear labelling and advertising restrictions, they say, are therefore essential to counterbalance corporate power and curb soaring rates of obesity and diabetes.
Opponents, by contrast, champion personal freedom. They maintain that adults are entitled to decide what they eat without governments acting as a 'nanny', and that excessive regulation is paternalistic and economically damaging. They also note that taxes on unhealthy food are regressive, hitting poorer consumers hardest, and that education is a fairer route to better choices than coercion.
In my opinion, both liberty and health matter, but they are not irreconcilable. Sensible regulation need not abolish choice; it can simply ensure that choices are informed and that the most vulnerable are shielded. Mandatory labelling, limits on marketing to children and modest levies on the unhealthiest products strike a reasonable balance. I therefore believe governments should regulate the food industry, provided they do so proportionately and pair it with education rather than relying on prohibition alone.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both views are explored even-handedly in separate paragraphs and a distinct personal opinion ('targeted regulation is justified') is stated early and reaffirmed in the conclusion.
- Cohesion: balanced framing through 'Those favouring intervention' and 'Opponents, by contrast' clearly demarcates the two sides for the reader.
- Lexical resource: evaluative vocabulary such as 'paternalistic', 'irreconcilable' and 'proportionately' conveys subtle distinctions with Band 9 accuracy.