Band 9 model answer
How people ought to spend their free time has become a contested issue in busy societies. While some dismiss hobbies as an indulgence that distracts from serious goals, others regard them as indispensable. I firmly side with the latter, believing that leisure pursuits are vital to a well-rounded life.
Those who view hobbies as wasteful generally prize productivity above all else. They contend that hours spent painting or playing sport could be redirected towards career advancement or further study, yielding tangible returns. In a fiercely competitive world, this argument carries a certain logic, since time is finite and ambition often demands sacrifice. For such people, recreation feels like an avoidable luxury that the disciplined can do without.
However, this perspective overlooks the profound benefits that leisure confers. Engaging in an absorbing pastime relieves accumulated stress, recharges the mind and frequently sparks creativity that spills over into one's work. Hobbies also nurture social bonds and a sense of identity beyond one's job, protecting individuals from the emptiness that pure ambition can breed. Far from squandering time, they make the remaining hours more productive and meaningful.
In my opinion, treating leisure as wasted effort reflects a dangerously narrow understanding of human flourishing. A life consumed entirely by work is not only joyless but ultimately unsustainable, often culminating in exhaustion and regret. Hobbies, by contrast, restore the balance that allows people to function at their best. I therefore conclude that far from being a frivolous distraction, leisure is an essential ingredient of a healthy, fulfilling existence.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a clear opinion ('I firmly side with the latter') is announced early and reinforced throughout, while both opposing views receive fair, developed treatment as the rubric demands.
- Cohesion: contrast is handled elegantly with 'However, this perspective overlooks' and 'by contrast', and pronoun reference such as 'such people' avoids clumsy repetition.
- Lexical Resource: idiomatic and precise phrasing like 'an absorbing pastime', 'human flourishing' and 'frivolous distraction' shows the lexical sophistication characteristic of Band 9.