Band 9 model answer
Brands increasingly bypass conventional advertising by paying online influencers to showcase their goods to large, devoted followings. While influencer marketing is not inherently deceptive, I agree that, as it is commonly practised today, it frequently misleads the very consumers who trust these figures most.
The core problem is the deliberate blurring of friendship and salesmanship. Followers are drawn to influencers precisely because they appear authentic, ordinary and relatable, sharing apparently candid recommendations between glimpses of their everyday lives. When a glowing review is in reality a carefully negotiated paid promotion, audiences understandably mistake commercial persuasion for genuine personal endorsement. This deception is compounded considerably when influencers conceal the financial relationship altogether, or bury it behind obscure hashtags that casual viewers scroll straight past, leaving consumers wholly unable to weigh the advice critically.
The consequences fall hardest on the young and impressionable, who constitute much of this enormous audience. Persuaded that a slimming tea or expensive cosmetic delivered a beloved influencer's flawless results, they may waste scarce money on ineffective or even unsafe products. That said, the practice is by no means irredeemable: where influencers transparently label sponsored content and promote only goods they have genuinely tested and believe in, their recommendations can be both honest and useful, much like any clearly disclosed advertisement.
In conclusion, although influencer endorsement need not deceive in principle, the prevailing lack of transparency means that in practice it very frequently does. I therefore largely agree that the practice misleads consumers as it currently stands, and firmly contend that clear, prominent and legally mandatory disclosure of every payment is absolutely essential to make it fair.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the response stakes out a qualified agreement and sustains it, distinguishing the practice in principle from how it is 'commonly practised', which shows precise engagement with the prompt.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the argument flows from mechanism (blurring of roles) to consequence (harm to the young), with 'That said' introducing a fair concession before the conclusion.
- Lexical Resource: nuanced phrasing such as 'salesmanship', 'candid recommendations' and 'mandatory disclosure' reflects flexible, accurate vocabulary.