Band 9 model answer
It is often claimed that the surge in international travel has knitted the world's cultures more closely together than ever before. While I largely agree that crossing borders fosters mutual understanding, I would argue that the depth of this understanding depends heavily on how, and in what spirit, people choose to travel.
There is compelling evidence that direct contact dissolves prejudice. A traveller who shares a meal with a host family, attempts a few words of an unfamiliar language or witnesses a religious festival at first hand inevitably returns with a more nuanced view of that society than any documentary could ever provide. Such encounters humanise distant nations, replacing crude stereotypes with genuine empathy and a lasting curiosity about how others live, worship and work.
Nevertheless, not all travel achieves this enlightening effect. Tourists who remain sealed within all-inclusive resorts, interacting only with the staff who serve them, may leave knowing little more than they arrived with. Worse still, superficial visits can sometimes reinforce condescending attitudes, as poverty is reframed as picturesque and ancient customs are reduced to a fleeting photo opportunity. In these cases, travel becomes mere consumption rather than meaningful connection between peoples.
On balance, then, I agree that international travel can substantially deepen cultural understanding, but only when it is undertaken with openness and respect. The mere act of boarding a plane guarantees nothing; meaningful insight grows instead from curiosity and active engagement. If travellers consciously approach other societies as humble students rather than detached spectators, then tourism truly becomes one of the most powerful and enduring bridges between peoples that we currently possess.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the 'to what extent' prompt is answered with a qualified position ('largely agree... depends on how people travel'), which is more sophisticated than a blanket agreement.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the essay pivots cleanly on 'Nevertheless' and 'On balance', and the recurring travel-versus-consumption contrast threads through all four paragraphs.
- Lexical Resource: vivid phrasing such as 'dissolves prejudice', 'crude stereotypes' and 'students rather than spectators' shows flexible, idiomatic control of vocabulary.