Band 9 model answer
Whether tourism enriches or erodes the communities that host it is a question that divides economists and residents alike. While both perspectives carry considerable weight, I ultimately believe that, when it is properly managed, tourism does far more good than harm to the places it touches.
Those who praise tourism point chiefly to its economic vitality. The industry generates steady employment for guides, hoteliers and artisans, and the revenue it injects often funds the schools, roads and clinics that local taxation alone could never support. In remote areas with few alternative industries, a reliable stream of visitors can be the difference between prosperity and decline, breathing fresh life into otherwise stagnant local economies and stemming the drift of young people to the cities.
Critics, however, warn that these gains can prove illusory. Profits frequently flow out to foreign hotel chains rather than remaining in the community, leaving residents with little more than low-paid, seasonal work. Moreover, soaring property prices can push locals out of their own neighbourhoods, while sacred customs are cynically repackaged as commercial spectacle. Such commodification, critics argue, gradually hollows out the very culture that drew visitors in the first place.
In my view, these dangers are real but by no means unavoidable. Where communities retain ownership of their assets and channel tourist money into genuinely local enterprise, the benefits clearly outweigh the costs. Consequently, I believe tourism should be embraced rather than rejected, provided that governments protect residents through fair and far-sighted regulation. With sensible safeguards in place, the prosperity it offers need not come at the expense of the very people it is meant to serve.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both views are explored in dedicated paragraphs and a clear personal stance is stated in the introduction and sustained throughout, satisfying the 'discuss both views' instruction fully.
- Coherence and Cohesion: contrast is managed elegantly with 'Critics, however' and 'In my view', while referencing words like 'these gains' and 'such commodification' bind ideas without repetition.
- Grammatical Range: the conditional structure 'Where communities retain ownership... the benefits clearly outweigh the costs' shows controlled use of complex subordination.