Band 9 model answer
As delicate coral reefs, ancient temples and protected wildernesses buckle under the sheer weight of visitors, many now argue that those who wish to see them should pay a substantial premium for the privilege. I strongly agree with this proposal, since higher fees can both protect these treasures and fund their long-term survival.
The most compelling justification is conservation finance. Maintaining a fragile site, whether by repairing eroded paths, restoring stonework or employing trained rangers, is genuinely expensive, and it seems only fair that the visitors who directly benefit should shoulder this burden rather than the general taxpayer. Substantial entrance fees create a dedicated stream of revenue that can be reinvested straight back into protecting the very attraction that generates it, making preservation reassuringly self-sustaining.
A second, equally important argument concerns demand. A high price naturally tempers visitor numbers, sparing sites the relentless footfall that steadily accelerates their decay. Those willing to pay more, moreover, tend to value the experience more deeply and behave far more responsibly once admitted. In this way, careful pricing acts as a gentle but remarkably effective filter against the careless mass tourism that has already ruined so many irreplaceable landmarks around the world.
Admittedly, critics may object that steep fees exclude poorer travellers, turning natural and cultural heritage into a luxury reserved for the rich. This concern is entirely legitimate, yet it can be eased through subsidised or free access for local residents and students. On balance, therefore, I firmly believe that charging tourists significantly more to enter genuinely fragile sites is a thoroughly sensible, and arguably quite necessary, safeguard for their long-term future and survival.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a strong agreement is declared and defended with two developed reasons, while a fair counter-argument is acknowledged and rebutted, showing balanced yet decisive treatment.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the argument is sequenced with 'The most compelling justification', 'A second... argument' and 'Admittedly', creating a transparent and persuasive structure.
- Grammatical Range: concessive constructions such as 'Admittedly, critics may object... yet it can be eased' demonstrate precise control of complex, evaluative grammar.