Band 9 model answer
Industrial agriculture has succeeded in feeding a growing global population, yet it does so at a heavy environmental price. I strongly agree that governments should actively steer the food system towards more sustainable methods, even if this entails short-term trade-offs in yield.
The environmental damage of intensive farming is difficult to overstate. The heavy use of synthetic fertilisers and pesticides degrades soil, contaminates waterways and decimates pollinators, while monoculture erodes the biodiversity on which long-term food security depends. Such practices also generate substantial greenhouse gas emissions. Because these costs accumulate gradually and fall on society at large, individual farmers have little incentive to change, which is precisely why government intervention is justified.
Through well-designed policy, the state can realign agriculture with environmental goals. Subsidies currently propping up damaging practices could be redirected to reward farmers who rotate crops, protect soil health and reduce chemical inputs. Investment in research, training and access to green technology would help smaller producers transition without ruinous costs. Governments might also use procurement and labelling to nurture consumer demand for sustainably grown food, thereby strengthening the market for responsible producers.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that governments must take the lead in promoting sustainable farming, since the long-term viability of the food system depends upon it. Although the transition will demand investment and patience, the alternative, exhausted soils and a destabilised climate, would ultimately undermine our very capacity to feed ourselves. Protecting the land that sustains us is an investment no responsible government can defer.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a strong, consistent position ('strongly agree') is established and defended with environmental justification and concrete policy proposals throughout.
- Coherence and Cohesion: causal reasoning is made explicit with 'Because these costs accumulate gradually... which is precisely why government intervention is justified', binding ideas tightly.
- Lexical Resource: specialised agricultural vocabulary such as 'monoculture', 'pollinators', 'synthetic fertilisers' and 'crop rotation' is used accurately, signalling Band 9 lexical control.