Band 9 model answer
Across much of the world, notes and coins are giving way to cards, apps and contactless payments, prompting talk of a fully cashless future. Although this transition brings genuine risks for the vulnerable, I believe its benefits in convenience, security and transparency ultimately outweigh the drawbacks.
The advantages of going cashless are considerable and increasingly evident. Digital payments are remarkably swift and effortless, sparing consumers the everyday nuisance of carrying change and allowing transactions to be completed in mere seconds. They also significantly enhance security, since electronic money cannot be physically stolen and every payment leaves a traceable record, which in turn makes tax evasion, bribery and the financing of organised crime far harder to conceal. For businesses, automated takings noticeably reduce both the cost and the danger of handling large sums of cash on the premises.
The drawbacks, nevertheless, must certainly not be dismissed. A purely cashless system risks excluding the elderly, the homeless and the poor, many of whom may lack bank accounts or the basic digital skills that these payments inevitably demand. The total reliance on technology also creates real fragility, for a single prolonged power cut or coordinated cyber-attack could paralyse commerce overnight, and the constant tracking of spending raises entirely legitimate concerns about personal privacy and state surveillance.
Weighing both sides, I conclude that the gains are decisive, provided that cash remains available as a fallback for those who need it. Governments should therefore manage the transition carefully rather than abolishing physical money outright. In conclusion, despite real worries about exclusion and security, the speed, safety and transparency of digital payments make the benefits of a cashless society, on balance, the greater.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the 'outweigh' question is answered with an explicit verdict in the introduction and a qualified restatement in the conclusion, both supported by developed reasons.
- Coherence and cohesion: the essay contrasts 'advantages' and 'drawbacks' in parallel paragraphs and resolves them with 'Weighing both sides', producing a clear argumentative arc.
- Lexical resource: precise terminology such as 'contactless payments', 'tax evasion' and 'fragility' alongside collocations like 'a traceable record' shows lexical sophistication.