Band 9 model answer
Thanks to longer lifespans and falling birth rates, the share of elderly citizens is climbing steeply across the developed world. This essay will examine the difficulties an ageing population poses for health systems and propose how governments might respond.
The most pressing problem is the surge in demand for care. Older people are far more likely to live with chronic conditions such as dementia, arthritis and heart disease, each requiring sustained and costly treatment. As their numbers grow while the working-age population shrinks, a smaller pool of taxpayers must fund ever-larger health budgets, straining public finances. Hospitals and care homes also face acute staff shortages, since there are simply too few nurses and carers to attend to so many dependent patients.
Governments can ease this pressure through both reform and foresight. Encouraging preventive medicine and active ageing, through screening programmes and exercise initiatives, keeps people healthier for longer and delays the onset of costly illness. Expanding community and home-based care is cheaper and more humane than lengthy hospital stays, while investment in training and immigration can replenish the depleted workforce. Some states may also need to raise the retirement age, broadening the tax base that sustains the system.
In conclusion, an ageing population intensifies demand and threatens both budgets and staffing levels. Yet with preventive care, a strengthened workforce and sensible fiscal adjustments, governments can shoulder this burden and ensure dignified care for their oldest citizens.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: problems and government measures are clearly separated, each supported with concrete, relevant detail.
- Coherence: the solutions paragraph mirrors the problems paragraph (demand, finances, staffing), giving the essay satisfying internal symmetry.
- Grammatical Range: participle and adverbial clauses such as 'broadening the tax base' and 'while investment can replenish' add controlled complexity.