Band 9 model answer
Governments routinely pass legislation intended to outlaw unfair treatment, yet whether such laws can truly deliver equality remains disputed. Having considered both perspectives, I believe laws are indispensable but cannot, by themselves, complete the task.
Advocates of legislation stress its immediate, tangible power. A law that bans discrimination in employment or guarantees equal pay sets a clear public standard and gives victims a concrete means of redress. Crucially, legislation can also reshape attitudes over time: behaviour that was once tolerated becomes socially unacceptable once it is formally prohibited, as the gradual retreat of openly racist practices in many countries demonstrates. In this sense, law does not merely follow public opinion but actively leads it.
The opposing view rightly cautions that statutes have limits. Prejudice often retreats underground rather than disappearing, expressing itself through subtle exclusion that no court can easily detect. A law may forbid bias in hiring, yet it cannot dictate the private judgements that shape who is shortlisted or trusted. Where enforcement is weak or public sympathy is absent, fine principles on paper may have little effect on daily reality.
My own conclusion draws these threads together. Legislation is essential because it establishes rights, deters open abuse, and signals society's values, but it must be reinforced by education, cultural change, and consistent enforcement if attitudes are to shift in earnest. Laws can compel behaviour and slowly bend belief, yet genuine equality ultimately depends on a society that internalises fairness rather than merely obeying it. The wisest course is to treat law as a vital foundation rather than the entire structure.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both views are explored with developed examples and the personal opinion ('indispensable but cannot by itself complete the task') is consistent and clearly argued throughout.
- Cohesion: the conclusion explicitly 'draws these threads together', and references such as 'In this sense' and 'The opposing view' connect ideas smoothly across paragraphs.
- Lexical resource: legalistic and abstract vocabulary, including 'redress', 'statutes', and 'internalises fairness', is deployed accurately and adds precision to a discussion of policy.