Band 9 model answer
Much of the twentieth century saw cities reshaped around the private car, with wide roads, vast car parks and distant suburbs. Today, however, that model is being questioned, and I strongly agree that cities should reduce their reliance on cars in favour of walkable, transit-friendly design.
The case against car dependence is, first and foremost, environmental and medical. Heavy traffic is a leading source of the air pollution and carbon emissions that damage both the planet and human lungs, while a culture of driving everywhere fosters the inactivity behind much modern ill health. A walkable city, by contrast, encourages residents to move under their own power, quietly improving fitness and clearing the air at the same time.
The benefits extend well beyond health. Streets freed from gridlock become safer and more pleasant, inviting people to linger, shop and socialise, which in turn revives local businesses and community life. Walkable districts also use land more efficiently, since they need fewer roads and car parks, leaving room for housing and parks. Cities such as Copenhagen demonstrate that prioritising pedestrians and cyclists produces a calmer, more prosperous urban environment.
In conclusion, I firmly agree that cities should curb their dependence on cars. The gains in clean air, public health, safety and economic vitality are too significant to ignore, and the experience of pioneering cities proves that a less car-centred future is not only desirable but entirely achievable.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a strongly agreeing stance is asserted at the outset and consistently supported with environmental, health, social and economic reasoning, fully answering the agree/disagree prompt.
- Coherence and Cohesion: progression is controlled with 'first and foremost' and 'The benefits extend well beyond health', linking paragraphs by escalating scope rather than repeating linkers.
- Lexical Resource: confident collocations like 'transit-friendly design', 'freed from gridlock' and 'economic vitality' demonstrate range and exactness.