Band 9 model answer
As cities grow denser and land prices soar, planners face a tempting shortcut: fill every plot with revenue-generating buildings. I strongly agree, however, that municipalities should protect and expand parks and green spaces, because their benefits to public wellbeing far outweigh the immediate financial cost.
The most compelling case rests on health. A growing body of research links regular contact with nature to lower stress, reduced rates of depression and even longer life expectancy. A tree-lined park invites residents to walk, jog and meet neighbours, countering the sedentary, isolated lifestyles that dense cities otherwise encourage. Greenery also cleans the air and cools streets during heatwaves, offering a practical defence against the worsening urban climate.
Green spaces additionally yield economic and social returns that critics often overlook. Far from being wasted land, a well-kept park raises the value of surrounding property and draws tourists, frequently repaying the investment many times over. Socially, parks act as great levellers, free spaces where rich and poor mingle on equal terms, strengthening the sense of community that anonymous high-rise living tends to dissolve.
In conclusion, although building on parkland may seem the more profitable option, I firmly believe cities should safeguard their green spaces. The gains in physical health, environmental resilience and social cohesion represent an investment in the long-term liveability of the city, and that is something no row of office blocks can replace.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a firmly agreeing position is declared early and justified through three distinct angles, health, economics and society, giving the response real depth.
- Coherence and Cohesion: each body paragraph foregrounds a different category of benefit, and referencing such as 'Far from being wasted land' rebuts the implied objection without breaking flow.
- Lexical Resource: precise expressions like 'sedentary, isolated lifestyles', 'great levellers' and 'environmental resilience' convey ideas economically and accurately.