Band 9 model answer
Social media now occupies a central place in young people's lives, prompting calls to bar everyone under sixteen from these platforms. While I acknowledge the genuine dangers involved, I largely disagree with an outright ban, favouring guided access instead.
Those advocating a prohibition raise valid concerns. Adolescent minds are highly impressionable, and constant exposure to idealised images can damage self-esteem and fuel anxiety. Younger users are also more vulnerable to predators, misinformation and addictive design, none of which they are equipped to navigate alone. Such risks understandably alarm parents and educators alike.
Nevertheless, a blanket ban strikes me as both impractical and counterproductive. Determined teenagers readily circumvent age restrictions, so prohibition often drives usage underground where supervision is impossible. More importantly, social media offers undeniable value: it sustains friendships, nurtures creativity and exposes young people to diverse ideas and communities. Denying these benefits wholesale would leave children unprepared for a digital world they must eventually inhabit.
A wiser approach, in my view, lies in supervised and educated use rather than exclusion. Schools should teach critical digital literacy, parents should set sensible boundaries, and platforms should enforce stronger protections for minors. By equipping children to recognise manipulation and protect themselves, society can harness the advantages of these networks while shielding the young from their worst excesses. For these reasons, I disagree that a total ban is the answer.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the writer states a clear, qualified position ('largely disagree') in the introduction and sustains it, acknowledging counter-arguments without abandoning the stance.
- Coherence and Cohesion: concession-and-rebuttal structure using 'Those advocating', 'Nevertheless' and 'A wiser approach' gives the essay a persuasive, well-sequenced flow.
- Lexical Resource: precise lexis like 'impressionable', 'circumvent age restrictions' and 'critical digital literacy' shows nuanced, higher-band vocabulary control.