Band 9 model answer
There is a widespread assumption that scientific and technical study is inherently more useful than the pursuit of art, literature or music. I largely disagree with this hierarchy, since it confuses immediate economic utility with genuine value.
The argument for prioritising the sciences is not without merit. Engineering, medicine and computing produce tangible advances, from new medicines to faster communication, and graduates in these fields tend to command higher salaries and fill obvious gaps in the labour market. In an age defined by technology, it is understandable that societies should encourage young people towards disciplines with such concrete returns.
Yet to dismiss creative subjects as inferior reveals a misunderstanding of how progress actually occurs. Literature and art sharpen critical thinking, empathy and the ability to communicate, capacities that every profession, scientists included, depends upon. The most influential innovators are frequently those who combine technical knowledge with imaginative insight, because invention requires not only calculation but the capacity to envision what does not yet exist. A purely technical education, divorced from the humanities, risks producing competent specialists who cannot situate their work within any broader human context.
In my judgement, the two domains are complementary rather than competing, and ranking one above the other is misguided. A flourishing society needs engineers and poets alike, and individuals benefit from exposure to both modes of thought. Rather than steering students towards the sciences and away from the arts, education should affirm that creativity and analysis are equally indispensable. Value, after all, cannot be measured by salary alone; the subjects that teach us to feel and to interpret are as vital as those that teach us to build.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the prompt's 'less valuable' claim is directly challenged with a measured 'largely disagree', and the essay distinguishes 'economic utility' from 'genuine value', keeping the central argument focused.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the structure moves through concession ('not without merit'), counter-argument ('Yet to dismiss'), and synthesis ('In my judgement'), with each stage clearly hinged on a discourse marker.
- Lexical Resource: abstract ideas are expressed with precision, e.g. 'tangible advances', 'imaginative insight', 'competent specialists', and the parallel 'engineers and poets alike' adds rhetorical polish.