Band 9 model answer
Painted across walls, bridges and shop shutters, street art arouses fierce debate. Some celebrate it as a vibrant cultural force, whereas others condemn it as the wilful defacement of property. In my opinion, the label depends entirely on consent and context.
Those who dismiss graffiti as vandalism have a defensible position. Much of what appears overnight on private buildings is crude, illegible scrawl that the owner never sanctioned and must pay to remove. Such markings can make neighbourhoods feel neglected and unsafe, signalling that no one is in control of the public space. From this perspective, the act is less self-expression than trespass, and the cost falls unfairly on innocent property owners.
However, the dismissive view overlooks the remarkable artistry that street art can attain. Murals by celebrated practitioners now draw tourists, regenerate run-down districts and give a voice to communities seldom heard in formal galleries. At its best, this work transforms grey, monotonous surfaces into arresting public statements about politics, identity and hope. To brand every spray-painted image as mindless vandalism is therefore to ignore a genuine and increasingly respected art form.
My own position is that the distinction hinges on permission rather than on style. When an artist works with the consent of a property owner or a local authority, the result enriches the urban landscape and deserves to be called art. When it is daubed onto someone else's wall without agreement, it remains vandalism, however skilful. Cities would be wise to provide designated spaces and commission talented artists, thereby channelling a powerful creative impulse into something the whole community can value.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both perspectives are argued substantively and the writer's criterion-based opinion ('depends entirely on consent and context') is original, consistent and clearly resolved in the final paragraph.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the contrast pivots smoothly on 'whereas' and 'However', while the conclusion's 'When ... When ...' parallel structure crystallises the position without listing connectors mechanically.
- Lexical Resource: expressive and accurate phrasing such as 'wilful defacement', 'illegible scrawl', 'arresting public statements' and 'channelling a powerful creative impulse' shows a strong, controlled range.