Band 9 model answer
Feeding a planet of eight billion people has driven agriculture towards industrial-scale meat production, raising profound and unavoidable moral questions. While the sheer efficiency of factory farming is undeniable, I ultimately regard the suffering it entails as ethically indefensible, and I believe that more humane systems must gradually replace it.
Those who defend intensive farming understandably emphasise its practical achievements. By confining animals and carefully optimising their feed, producers supply affordable protein to populations that could not otherwise afford it, thereby reducing hunger and stabilising volatile food prices. Supporters further contend that a sudden shift to free-range methods would inflate costs dramatically, hitting the poorest households hardest of all. Viewed purely through this economic lens, factory farming appears a pragmatic response to genuine scarcity.
The ethical case against the practice, however, is formidable. Animals are crammed into spaces so confined that they can barely move, denied all natural behaviours and subjected to chronic stress throughout short, joyless lives. Such treatment of sentient beings, undertaken solely to shave a few pennies from a price tag, offends widely held principles of compassion. The system also breeds disease and recklessly overuses antibiotics, posing serious risks that extend to human health and the wider environment alike.
Weighing affordability against cruelty, I find the moral cost decisive. Cheap meat purchased through institutionalised suffering is a false economy once its hidden tolls are fully tallied. Governments should phase in stricter welfare standards while encouraging plant-rich diets and supporting farmers through the transition. Progress need not condemn the poor to hunger; rather, it should reject the notion that profit can ever excuse the systematic mistreatment of living creatures.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay addresses both the economic justification and the ethical objection, then commits firmly to a position ('ethically indefensible') with a realistic policy proposal.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: varied complex sentences, including the participle clause 'undertaken solely to shave pennies from a price tag', are controlled and error-free.
- Lexical Resource: vivid, accurate collocations like 'industrial-scale meat production', 'chronic stress' and 'a false economy' demonstrate sophisticated vocabulary.