Band 9 model answer
In an age of heightened ecological awareness, the continued survival of recreational hunting strikes many observers as a troubling anachronism. While I accept that tightly regulated hunting can occasionally serve legitimate ends, I largely agree that killing wild animals purely for sport should be prohibited by law.
The central objection is fundamentally ethical. Inflicting suffering and death on a sentient creature merely for amusement is extremely difficult to justify when no necessity, such as food or self-defence, compels it. Modern societies increasingly recognise that animals possess interests worthy of genuine moral consideration, and trophy hunting, which reduces a living being to a mere wall ornament, sits uneasily with this evolving conscience. A ban would clearly signal that cruelty pursued for pleasure has no place in a civilised nation.
There is, admittedly, a counter-argument grounded in conservation economics. Proponents claim that carefully managed hunting generates revenue that funds anti-poaching patrols and incentivises local communities to tolerate wildlife on their land. In a handful of reserves, culling surplus animals may even help maintain a fragile ecological balance. These points have some validity, yet they describe narrow, closely supervised exceptions rather than a defence of hunting as a sport in general.
On balance, therefore, I support a comprehensive ban accompanied by limited, scientifically justified exemptions. The supposed benefits of sport hunting could largely be replicated through eco-tourism and direct government funding, neither of which requires bloodshed for entertainment. Where killing is genuinely needed for population control, it should be conducted by trained professionals, not by paying enthusiasts. Sport that depends on the death of wild animals belongs firmly to a less enlightened past.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the response answers the 'to what extent' prompt with a clear, qualified position ('largely agree... with limited exemptions') and defends it consistently.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the concession paragraph is flagged with 'There is, admittedly, a counter-argument', and 'On balance, therefore' neatly signals the return to the writer's view.
- Lexical Resource: emotive yet formal phrasing such as 'sentient creature', 'wall ornament' and 'a less enlightened past' conveys argument with precision and impact.