Band 9 model answer
In an effort to curb aviation emissions, a number of governments are channelling vast sums into high-speed rail with the explicit aim of rendering short internal flights obsolete. In my assessment, the advantages of this strategy comfortably outweigh its considerable costs.
The most compelling benefit is environmental. Aircraft are among the most carbon-intensive forms of travel, whereas electrified trains, especially when powered by renewables, emit a fraction of the greenhouse gases per passenger. Replacing flights between nearby cities therefore makes a meaningful contribution to climate targets. Rail also offers practical advantages: stations sit in city centres rather than distant airports, and travellers are spared lengthy security queues and the tedious transfers to out-of-town terminals, often making the door-to-door journey faster than flying despite the lower cruising speed.
The drawbacks, though real, are largely transitional. Constructing such networks demands enormous upfront capital and can disrupt communities and habitats along the route, while ticket prices may initially exceed those of budget airlines that benefit from decades of established infrastructure. Yet these costs are one-off or short-lived, whereas the benefits accrue over decades, and the high fixed cost is gradually offset as passenger numbers climb. Critics who oppose the investment on financial grounds often overlook the hidden subsidies and environmental damage that aviation quietly imposes on society.
In conclusion, although high-speed rail is expensive to build and inevitably causes some disruption, its environmental gains, convenience and long-term economic value far surpass these temporary disadvantages. For journeys of a few hundred kilometres, replacing planes with trains represents a forward-looking and ultimately justified use of public funds.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the introduction commits to a clear verdict ('comfortably outweigh') and every body paragraph quantifies advantages against disadvantages, directly answering the outweigh question.
- Coherence: the concession paragraph reframes drawbacks as 'largely transitional', a sophisticated cohesive move that strengthens the overall position.
- Lexical resource: technical collocations such as 'carbon-intensive', 'upfront capital' and 'hidden subsidies' reflect Band 9 command of register.