Band 9 model answer
It is increasingly argued that buses, trams and trains should be provided at no cost to passengers as a means of cutting congestion and improving air quality. While I acknowledge the environmental appeal of this proposal, I largely disagree that universal free transport is the wisest use of public money.
Admittedly, abolishing fares would carry genuine benefits. Removing the price barrier encourages people to leave their cars at home, thereby thinning out traffic and lowering harmful emissions in densely populated areas. It would also assist those on low incomes, for whom daily fares represent a meaningful expense, and could simplify operations by eliminating ticketing systems, ticket inspectors and fare evasion altogether, allowing buses to load passengers more quickly.
However, the drawbacks are substantial. Running a network is enormously costly, and lost fare revenue must be recovered through higher taxation, which is rarely popular and may divert funds from schools or hospitals that arguably deserve greater priority. Free services also tend to become overcrowded and poorly maintained, as demand surges without corresponding investment in extra capacity, ultimately deterring the very passengers the policy hoped to attract. A more sensible approach, in my opinion, is to keep fares modest but heavily subsidised, reserving free travel for groups who genuinely need it, such as students, pensioners and the unemployed.
In conclusion, although free public transport could ease pollution and aid the disadvantaged, the financial strain and risk of overcrowding outweigh these gains. Targeted subsidies and affordable, reliable services would deliver most of the environmental benefit at a fraction of the cost, making them a more responsible policy than blanket abolition of fares.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: a clear, qualified stance ('largely disagree') is announced in the introduction and the final paragraph restates it with a concrete alternative, fully addressing the agree/disagree prompt.
- Coherence: the essay concedes before refuting ('Admittedly... However'), giving a balanced, well-sequenced argument that a Band 9 examiner rewards.
- Lexical resource: collocations such as 'thinning out traffic', 'heavily subsidised' and 'blanket abolition of fares' show flexible, natural word choice.