Band 9 model answer
Whether handing children a weekly allowance genuinely teaches financial responsibility is widely debated among parents. While I agree that pocket money can be a valuable teaching tool, I do not consider it sufficient on its own; it must be paired with guidance to be truly effective.
There is much to be said for giving children their own money. Receiving a fixed sum compels youngsters to make real decisions: whether to spend immediately or save for something more desirable. Through this process, they encounter the concept of opportunity cost first-hand, learning that resources are finite. A child who spends an entire allowance hastily and then cannot afford a coveted toy absorbs a lesson far more memorable than any lecture. In this sense, pocket money offers practical, experiential learning that abstract instruction cannot replicate.
Nevertheless, money handed over without explanation teaches little. If parents simply provide cash and ignore how it is used, children may develop careless habits or come to expect money as an entitlement rather than something to be earned. Without conversations about budgeting, saving, and the value of work, the allowance becomes a missed opportunity. Some argue, too, that linking small payments to chores conveys the relationship between effort and reward more powerfully than an unconditional handout.
On balance, I believe pocket money is a useful but incomplete instrument. Its educational value depends entirely on the surrounding context: when parents accompany an allowance with open discussion, modest expectations, and gentle encouragement to save, children acquire genuine financial literacy. Money alone instructs nobody; it is thoughtful, engaged parenting that transforms a few modest coins into a genuinely lasting lesson in prudence and self-control.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the writer answers the 'to what extent' question with a qualified agreement ('useful but incomplete instrument') sustained throughout.
- Coherence and Cohesion: concession markers ('Nevertheless', 'On balance') manage the partial-agreement stance and signal the essay's logical turns.
- Lexical Resource: precise economic vocabulary such as 'opportunity cost', 'financial literacy' and 'entitlement' lends authority and accuracy.