Band 9 model answer
Covering more than two-thirds of the planet, the oceans teem with life that is now imperilled by human carelessness. This essay will identify the foremost threats facing marine creatures before outlining the steps needed to defend them.
Several pressures are pushing ocean life towards crisis. Overfishing is perhaps the most immediate, as industrial fleets extract fish faster than populations can recover, collapsing stocks and disrupting entire food chains. Pollution compounds the damage: plastics choke seabirds and turtles, while chemical run-off and oil spills poison coastal waters. Looming over all of this is climate change, which warms and acidifies the seas, bleaching coral reefs that shelter a quarter of marine species. Together these forces are eroding the health of the oceans at an alarming pace.
Addressing the crisis demands coordinated action. Governments should establish extensive marine protected areas where fishing is banned, allowing depleted populations to rebuild, and enforce strict quotas elsewhere. Reducing plastic at its source, through bans on single-use items and improved waste management, would stem the tide of debris reaching the sea. Crucially, cutting greenhouse-gas emissions is indispensable, since no local measure can succeed while the entire ocean grows warmer and more acidic. International cooperation is essential, given that no single nation governs the open sea.
In conclusion, marine life is besieged by overfishing, pollution and a warming climate. Yet through protected zones, tighter regulation, reduced waste and decisive climate policy, humanity can still reverse much of the harm. The oceans are resilient if given the chance to recover, and securing that chance is a responsibility we cannot postpone.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the two-part prompt is fully satisfied, with threats and solutions each given a developed, clearly demarcated paragraph.
- Coherence and Cohesion: cohesive listing ('perhaps the most immediate', 'Pollution compounds the damage', 'Looming over all of this') organises multiple threats fluently.
- Lexical Resource: accurate scientific lexis including 'acidifies', 'bleaching coral reefs' and 'marine protected areas' reflects a wide, topic-appropriate vocabulary.