Band 9 model answer
As smartphones and streaming services capture ever more of our attention, the traditional printed book is steadily yielding ground to screens and online video. Although this shift brings real conveniences, I believe it carries more negative than positive consequences for society.
The advantages of the transition should not be dismissed. Digital devices place entire libraries in a single pocket, often at lower cost, and bring text and learning to remote communities that lack physical bookshops. Videos, meanwhile, can explain a complex idea vividly in minutes, and features such as adjustable fonts and read-aloud tools make reading accessible to those who once struggled with print.
Nevertheless, the manner in which screens are typically consumed gives cause for concern. Online environments are engineered for distraction, with notifications and endless feeds fragmenting attention and discouraging the sustained, deep reading that books demand. Replacing the patient unfolding of a novel with short clips risks weakening concentration, empathy and the capacity for complex thought, qualities that immersive reading is known to cultivate. A video, moreover, delivers conclusions ready-made, whereas a book obliges the reader to imagine and reflect. There is a meaningful difference between scrolling restlessly through fragments and losing oneself in a chapter for an hour.
In conclusion, while digital platforms have admirably widened access to information, the broader drift from deep reading towards rapid, fragmented consumption represents a worrying loss. The healthiest course is not to reject technology but to preserve the discipline of focused reading alongside it. Until society actively protects that habit, I judge the screen's quiet displacement of the book to be, on balance, a regrettable development.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the positive/negative prompt is answered with a clear overall verdict, and the writer fairly acknowledges benefits before explaining why the drawbacks dominate.
- Cohesion: contrast and conclusion are managed with 'Nevertheless' and 'In conclusion', while pronoun reference ('that habit', 'this shift') maintains cohesion without repetition.
- Lexical Resource: evocative and precise wording such as 'fragmenting attention', 'patient unfolding of a novel' and 'quiet displacement' shows flexibility and stylistic control.