Band 9 model answer
As biologists make steady strides in unravelling the underlying mechanics of the ageing process, the tantalising prospect of radically extending human life has captured both popular imagination and substantial funding. Yet I am not persuaded that longevity should rank as a foremost priority for medical research; scarce resources, in my considered view, would be far better directed elsewhere.
The appeal of one day conquering ageing is, of course, entirely understandable. Were the debilitating diseases of old age postponed or eliminated outright, individuals could enjoy many more years of vigorous health and continue contributing meaningfully to society. Advocates also note, quite fairly, that research into ageing illuminates the underlying mechanisms behind cancer and dementia, so the broader pursuit may yield valuable medical dividends along the way.
Nevertheless, several weighty considerations sharply temper my enthusiasm for this goal. Dramatically lengthening human lifespans, if achievable only for the very wealthy, would entrench profound inequality and could badly strain pension systems, healthcare provision and an already gravely overburdened planet. More fundamentally, vast numbers of people across the world still die prematurely from entirely preventable conditions such as malaria and malnutrition; channelling scarce funds towards extending already-long lives in affluent nations, while these glaring inequities persist, strikes me as ethically indefensible.
My conclusion is therefore one of cautious reprioritisation rather than outright rejection. I do not advocate halting longevity research altogether, since the knowledge it generates is plainly valuable, but I firmly believe it should rank well below concerted efforts to ensure that everyone, everywhere, reaches a normal lifespan in good health. Medicine's first and most pressing obligation is surely to close the gulf between rich and poor.
Examiner’s notes
- The two-part question is fully addressed with a decisive stance (focus resources elsewhere), supported by ethical and practical reasoning and a measured concession.
- Cohesion flows through evaluative signposting ('Nevertheless, several weighty considerations sharply temper', 'My conclusion is therefore') and consistent referencing of the central claim.
- Lexis is high-level: 'medical dividends', 'entrench profound inequality', 'cautious reprioritisation' and 'ethically indefensible' show precise academic phrasing.