Band 9 model answer
Many education systems oblige pupils to participate in physical education throughout their entire schooling. While compelling genuinely reluctant children to compete can occasionally be counter-productive, I firmly contend that the broad benefits of mandatory sport comfortably outweigh its limited drawbacks.
The principal advantage is the cultivation of lifelong health habits. Childhood is precisely when attitudes towards exercise are first formed, and a curriculum that normalises regular movement directly combats the sedentary lifestyles now driving alarming rates of obesity. Beyond the purely physical, team sports instil discipline, resilience and cooperation, equipping students with valuable social skills that conventional classroom lessons seldom teach. Making participation compulsory ensures these benefits reach every single child, not merely the naturally athletic minority who would volunteer anyway.
The most credible objection concerns those who find competitive sport humiliating or acutely distressing. Forcing a self-conscious adolescent onto a football pitch can entrench a lasting aversion to exercise, achieving the very opposite of the intended effect. There is also the matter of opportunity cost: time devoted to compulsory games is time withdrawn from academic study. These concerns are perfectly legitimate, yet they argue for reforming how sport is taught rather than abolishing the requirement altogether.
In conclusion, a sensible compromise resolves most of the perceived disadvantages. Schools should retain compulsory physical activity but broaden it considerably to encompass non-competitive options such as dance, swimming or hiking, allowing every pupil to find a genuinely enjoyable outlet. On balance, the enduring gains in health, character and social confidence decisively eclipse the manageable downsides, so I believe sport should indeed remain a mandatory part of every child's education.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay answers the 'advantages outweigh disadvantages' question explicitly, weighing both sides and reaching a clear, well-supported verdict ('decisively eclipse').
- Cohesion: paragraph openers ('The principal advantage', 'The most credible objection', 'In conclusion') create a transparent structure, and 'yet' signals a precise contrast.
- Lexical resource: sophisticated wording such as 'normalises movement', 'entrench a lasting aversion' and 'opportunity cost' reflects accurate, less common vocabulary.