Band 9 model answer
The accelerating automation of work, in which machines and software perform tasks once carried out by people, is reshaping economies worldwide. While the transition poses real risks, I believe that, managed wisely, it represents a largely positive development.
There are undeniable reasons for concern. The most immediate is unemployment, as automation displaces workers in manufacturing, retail and, increasingly, clerical roles. Those whose jobs vanish may lack the skills to find new ones, which can deepen inequality and concentrate wealth in the hands of those who own the technology. If left unaddressed, such disruption could provoke serious social tension.
Nonetheless, the advantages are more compelling over the longer term. Machines excel at dangerous, repetitive and physically punishing tasks, so automation can spare humans from drudgery and hazard, from mining to assembly lines. By lowering production costs and boosting output, it also makes goods cheaper and more abundant, raising living standards. Crucially, history suggests that technology destroys some jobs while creating others; the rise of computing, for instance, generated entire industries that had never existed before. Automation is therefore likely to shift the workforce towards more creative, supervisory and caring roles that machines cannot easily perform.
The key lies in managing the change responsibly. Governments must invest heavily in education and retraining so that displaced workers can move into emerging fields, and provide support during the transition.
In conclusion, although automation threatens certain jobs and may widen inequality in the short term, its capacity to eliminate dangerous labour, lower costs and create new opportunities makes it, on balance, a positive force, provided society prepares for its effects.
Examiner’s notes
- Answers the positive-or-negative question with a clear, qualified stance and weighs both sides before concluding.
- Strengthens the argument with a historical parallel (computing created new industries) rather than bare opinion.
- Higher-band lexis is used naturally: displaces, drudgery, retraining, concentrate wealth.