Band 9 model answer
As machines and intelligent software grow ever more capable, the prospect of widespread job displacement has provoked considerable unease. Although the disruption is real, I regard the automation of work as, on balance, a positive development for society.
The gravest concern is the loss of livelihoods. Automation threatens to eliminate routine roles in manufacturing, transport and administration, potentially leaving millions without an income and deepening inequality between those who own technology and those who once competed with it. Communities built around a single industry may be hollowed out within a generation, and older workers in particular may find it painfully hard to retrain for unfamiliar roles. These dangers are serious and must not be downplayed.
Yet history suggests that technology destroys some jobs while creating others, often better ones. Machines excel at dull, dangerous or repetitive tasks, freeing human beings to pursue creative, caring and strategic work that machines cannot replicate. The industrial revolution displaced farm labourers yet ultimately generated unimaginable new occupations, and there is little reason to assume this wave will differ. Greater productivity also lowers the cost of goods, raising living standards across the board.
In conclusion, while automation will undoubtedly cause painful transitions and demands a robust response, its long-term effect is likely to be beneficial. The key lies in preparation: governments and businesses must invest heavily in retraining and education so that displaced workers can move into emerging fields. Managed wisely, with adequate safety nets for those caught in the transition, the rise of intelligent machines promises to relieve humanity of drudgery and unlock a more inventive and prosperous future, which is why I view it as a fundamentally positive force.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the question is answered with a clear 'positive on balance' judgement, supported by a fair treatment of the negative case before the writer's view prevails.
- Coherence and Cohesion: contrast is handled elegantly through 'Yet history suggests' and 'In conclusion', and pronoun reference ('this wave', 'these dangers') aids cohesion.
- Lexical Resource: expressive collocations such as 'job displacement', 'hollowed out' and 'relieve humanity of drudgery' display a wide, natural lexical range.