Band 9 model answer
Rapid progress in artificial intelligence suggests that fully autonomous cars, requiring no human driver, may soon populate our streets. Although legitimate concerns surround the technology, I regard its widespread adoption as, on balance, a positive development for society.
The principal reason for my optimism is safety. The overwhelming majority of collisions are caused by human error, whether through fatigue, distraction or recklessness, none of which afflict a properly programmed machine. By reacting faster and never tiring, autonomous vehicles could in time prevent millions of injuries. They would also extend independence to those currently unable to drive, such as the elderly and disabled, while freeing millions of commuters to work, read or rest during journeys that once demanded their undivided attention.
That said, the transition will not be free of difficulty. Software can be hacked or can malfunction in unforeseen ways, raising thorny ethical and legal questions about who bears responsibility when an automated vehicle causes harm on a public road. Millions of professional drivers may also see their livelihoods vanish, demanding careful retraining and social support. These are serious objections, yet they strike me as obstacles to be managed rather than reasons to abandon a fundamentally beneficial technology, much as earlier societies adapted to the motor car itself.
In conclusion, while self-driving vehicles raise genuine concerns about security, liability and employment, their potential to slash road deaths and broaden mobility makes them a welcome advance. With sensible regulation and support for displaced workers, the arrival of autonomous cars should prove a net gain for humanity rather than a threat to be feared.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay takes a definite positive stance, acknowledges the opposing view fairly, and resolves it without sitting on the fence, fully meeting the prompt.
- Cohesion: concessive linking ('That said', 'yet they strike me as obstacles to be managed') signals the shift from drawbacks back to the thesis elegantly.
- Lexical resource: precise diction such as 'afflict', 'thorny questions', 'liability' and 'displaced workers' demonstrates Band 9 range and accuracy.