Band 9 model answer
From coffee houses to clothing outlets, multinational brands now occupy prime locations in almost every town, prompting accusations that they suffocate independent traders. While these concerns are partly justified, I largely agree that the unchecked spread of global brands does damage local businesses, though the effect is not uniform.
The core of the argument is economic muscle. Global chains enjoy vast purchasing power, slick marketing and the ability to absorb losses while they capture market share, advantages no family-run shop can match. When a familiar international name opens nearby, customers are often drawn by its predictability and lower prices, and long-established local enterprises may be priced out within months. The resulting loss is not merely commercial; it can hollow out the distinctive character of a high street, replacing it with interchangeable storefronts seen everywhere.
Nonetheless, the picture is not wholly bleak, and this is where I qualify my agreement. Some local businesses thrive precisely by offering what chains cannot, namely personal service, regional specialities and a sense of community. Global brands can even raise footfall in an area, indirectly benefiting nearby independents. The decisive factor is whether the local enterprise competes on character rather than on price alone.
In conclusion, I agree that the relentless expansion of global brands frequently harms local businesses by undercutting them and eroding local distinctiveness, yet skilfully differentiated independents can survive and even prosper. The harm, therefore, is real but not inevitable, and supportive local policy can tilt the balance in favour of homegrown enterprise.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the qualified position ('largely agree... though the effect is not uniform') is established early and maintained, with a genuine counter-consideration that refines rather than contradicts the stance.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the argument flows from harm to qualification via 'Nonetheless... this is where I qualify my agreement', and the conclusion explicitly weighs both sides ('real but not inevitable').
- Lexical Resource: economic vocabulary such as 'purchasing power', 'priced out' and 'undercutting' is used accurately, while 'hollow out the distinctive character' adds figurative colour.