Band 9 model answer
Mass international tourism has transformed once-remote communities into bustling destinations, a phenomenon that delivers prosperity but also strains the very cultures travellers come to admire. On balance, I believe the benefits to local cultures can outweigh the harms, provided tourism is managed responsibly.
The positive impact is significant. Visitor spending creates a strong economic incentive to keep traditional crafts, festivals and cuisines alive, since these are precisely what attract tourists. Communities that might otherwise have abandoned ancestral skills instead pass them on, knowing they have commercial as well as sentimental value. Furthermore, sustained contact with outsiders fosters mutual understanding and pride, as residents witness foreigners valuing customs they may once have taken for granted.
The drawbacks, however, are serious and must not be ignored. Where tourist numbers overwhelm a site, authentic rituals can degenerate into hollow performances staged purely for cameras, and sacred places risk being reduced to photogenic backdrops. Soaring property prices may also displace the very residents whose heritage was the attraction, leaving a commodified shell behind. These outcomes represent genuine cultural loss rather than mere inconvenience.
In conclusion, although unregulated tourism can trivialise and distort local traditions, well-governed tourism that caps visitor numbers and channels revenue back into the community tends to preserve and dignify them. My view is therefore conditional but ultimately positive: the benefits outweigh the drawbacks only when authenticity, rather than short-term profit, guides how a destination is developed.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the conditional thesis ('benefits can outweigh the harms, provided...') is answered consistently, with both benefits and drawbacks weighed and the conclusion tying the judgement to responsible management.
- Coherence and Cohesion: balanced discourse markers ('The positive impact', 'The drawbacks, however') and the concluding 'conditional but ultimately positive' make the evaluative stance easy to track.
- Lexical Resource: vivid, accurate choices such as 'commodified shell', 'photogenic backdrops' and 'trivialise and distort' demonstrate strong topic-specific range.