Band 9 model answer
Across much of the world, young citizens are conspicuously absent from polling stations and political debate. This withdrawal weakens democracy, since a generation that does not vote risks being governed by policies that ignore its interests. Both the causes and the cures deserve careful attention.
Several factors explain the disengagement. Many young people feel that mainstream politics simply does not address the issues they care about, such as climate change, housing affordability and job insecurity, and they perceive elderly career politicians as remote and out of touch. Compounding this is a sense of powerlessness: when elections seem to change little, voting can feel futile. The arcane, jargon-heavy language of politics further alienates a generation accustomed to clear, immediate communication online.
Reversing this trend requires meeting young people where they are. Schools could introduce engaging civic education that treats politics as a practical tool for solving real problems rather than a dry institutional subject. Politicians and parties, for their part, should communicate authentically through the digital platforms the young actually use, and should champion the issues that genuinely affect their futures. Lowering the voting age and creating youth councils with real influence would also signal that their voices count, transforming abstract citizenship into tangible participation.
In conclusion, young people's apathy stems largely from feeling unrepresented, powerless and excluded by impenetrable political language. It can be remedied through relevant education, authentic digital engagement and meaningful opportunities to shape decisions. If governments treat the young not as future voters but as citizens whose concerns matter now, they can rekindle the interest on which the health of any democracy ultimately rests.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the two required tasks, reasons and remedies, are each developed with three substantive points and clearly connected, giving balanced and complete coverage.
- Coherence and Cohesion: cause and solution paragraphs mirror one another, and the conclusion synthesises both with a memorable final clause about democratic health.
- Lexical Resource: expressive vocabulary such as 'conspicuously absent', 'disengagement', 'arcane, jargon-heavy language' and 'rekindle' shows flexibility and precision.