Band 9 model answer
Few budget debates provoke stronger feelings than the choice between funding ambitious projects like space programmes and meeting everyday social needs. Both priorities have committed advocates, and weighing them reveals genuine trade-offs rather than an obvious answer.
Supporters of investment in space and defence emphasise long-term returns. Space research has yielded technologies, from satellite navigation to advances in medicine, that now underpin ordinary life, while a credible military deters aggression and safeguards the very stability on which prosperity depends. They also argue that grand national endeavours inspire scientific ambition and unite citizens behind a shared purpose. Cutting such spending, on this view, would be short-sighted economising.
Those who champion social services counter that a government's first duty is to its own people. Underfunded hospitals, overcrowded classrooms and inadequate pensions inflict immediate, tangible harm, whereas the dividends of a Mars mission are remote and uncertain. Money diverted to prestige projects, they insist, could lift millions out of hardship today. For them, abstract glory cannot justify neglecting the sick and the poor.
My own sympathies lie largely with the second camp, though not absolutely. A state that fails to feed, heal and educate its population forfeits its legitimacy, so essential services must take precedence when resources are scarce. Nevertheless, abandoning research and defence entirely would be reckless, since security and innovation protect future welfare. The sensible course is therefore a question of proportion: fund social provision generously while preserving a modest, strategic commitment to science and defence. Balanced in this way, public money can both relieve present suffering and secure the nation's longer-term future.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay fully explores both spending priorities and reaches a nuanced opinion ('largely with the second camp, though not absolutely') rather than a crude either/or.
- Lexical Resource: economic and political collocations such as 'short-sighted economising', 'forfeits its legitimacy' and 'strategic commitment' show range and precision.
- Coherence and Cohesion: each body paragraph opens with a clear topic sentence and the conclusion synthesises rather than merely repeats, advancing 'a question of proportion'.