Band 9 model answer
Each year, affluent governments transfer billions in aid to the developing world, yet the wisdom of doing so is fiercely contested. Some see such generosity as indispensable, while others view it as counterproductive. After weighing both arguments, I believe aid remains valuable provided it is intelligently designed.
Proponents stress that aid saves lives and lays foundations for growth. Emergency relief feeds populations struck by famine or disaster, while sustained funding builds schools, clinics and infrastructure that poorer states could never finance alone. Crucially, healthier and better-educated citizens become more productive, so well-targeted assistance can set in motion a virtuous cycle of development. For supporters, the moral imperative to help is reinforced by these tangible results.
Sceptics, however, highlight aid's unintended consequences. Large inflows of money can entrench corrupt elites, who siphon off funds rather than serving their people, and can foster a debilitating dependency that discourages self-reliance. Cheap imported goods and donated produce may even undercut local farmers and manufacturers, stifling the very economies aid is meant to strengthen. From this angle, charity can quietly perpetuate the poverty it claims to cure.
My own view reconciles these positions. The critics are right that poorly governed handouts can do harm, but the remedy is reform, not abandonment. Aid channelled through accountable institutions, tied to measurable outcomes and focused on building local capacity rather than fostering reliance, genuinely transforms lives. Withdrawing support altogether would condemn millions to avoidable suffering. The goal, therefore, should not be to give less, but to give far more wisely, ensuring that every donated pound advances lasting independence rather than perpetual need.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both perspectives are examined in balanced detail and the writer's conditional opinion ('provided it is intelligently designed') is clear and sustained to the final sentence.
- Lexical Resource: development-specific phrasing such as 'virtuous cycle of development', 'entrench corrupt elites' and 'building local capacity' demonstrates sophisticated topic vocabulary.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: varied complex sentences, including the participial 'channelled through accountable institutions, tied to measurable outcomes', are controlled and error-free.