Band 9 model answer
In a number of societies, remaining at one's desk long after official hours has become an unspoken expectation rather than an exception. This essay will explore why such a culture of overwork persists and suggest how it might be curbed.
A primary cause is the way commitment is perceived. In many workplaces, the time spent at the office is treated as a proxy for dedication, so employees linger late to signal loyalty and avoid appearing idle, regardless of whether the extra hours are productive. Economic insecurity reinforces this: where jobs are scarce, staff fear that leaving on time may mark them out for redundancy. In addition, weak labour regulation and chronic understaffing leave existing workers shouldering tasks that ought, by any reasonable measure, to be shared among a larger team.
Several remedies could ease the problem. Governments could legislate maximum working weeks and enforce them rigorously, as some European nations already do, removing the pressure to compete through sheer endurance. Equally important is a cultural shift led from the top by managers, who should judge employees on tangible results rather than hours logged and openly encourage their teams to go home on time. Companies might also adopt flexible schedules and adequate staffing levels, ensuring that no single individual is consistently overwhelmed.
In conclusion, the culture of long hours arises from mistaken assumptions about dedication, combined with insecurity and poor regulation. It can be tackled through firmer laws and, crucially, a change in how productivity is measured and valued. Reducing excessive work is not a sign of laziness but a means of building healthier, more efficient workplaces in which people perform better precisely because they are not exhausted.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the two-part prompt is answered completely, with causes ('proxy for dedication', insecurity, weak regulation) matched to targeted solutions.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the essay sequences ideas with 'A primary cause', 'In addition' and 'Equally important', maintaining a clear cause-and-remedy flow.
- Lexical Resource: nuanced lexis such as 'a proxy for dedication', 'mark them out for redundancy' and 'sheer endurance' shows sophisticated word choice.