Band 9 model answer
Whether scarce public funds should be devoted to museums and the preservation of cultural heritage, or redirected towards more pressing concerns, is a perennial dilemma for governments. While the competing demands on budgets are real, I believe sustained public investment in cultural heritage is both justified and worthwhile.
Those who would divert the money make a humane case. Public budgets are finite, and when hospitals are overstretched and citizens lack housing, spending on artefacts and historic buildings can appear to be an indulgence. From this perspective, immediate human welfare must take precedence over the preservation of objects, however venerable, since no exhibit can outweigh a life improved or saved.
The opposing argument, which I ultimately endorse, recognises that heritage serves needs that are real if less visible. Museums educate, foster identity and connect generations to their shared past, while well-preserved heritage sites generate substantial tourism revenue that can, in turn, fund the very services critics prioritise. Allowing irreplaceable monuments to crumble would inflict a permanent loss that no future budget could reverse, whereas other expenditures can be deferred and resumed. Cultural and material welfare, in short, are not truly in opposition.
In conclusion, although urgent social needs deserve priority during genuine emergencies, this should not justify the wholesale neglect of cultural heritage. My view is that a wise government funds both, treating museums and historic sites not as luxuries but as long-term investments in education, identity and even economic prosperity.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the discuss-both-views requirement is met fully, and the opinion ('sustained investment is justified') is woven through the essay rather than reserved entirely for the conclusion.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the pivot 'The opposing argument, which I ultimately endorse' simultaneously signals contrast and reveals the writer's stance, while 'in turn' tracks the funding-revenue link.
- Lexical Resource: heritage-specific lexis such as 'artefacts', 'irreplaceable monuments' and 'venerable' is used precisely, and 'long-term investments' reframes the issue persuasively.