Band 9 model answer
Whether corporations exist primarily to enrich shareholders or to serve the wider community is a debate that has intensified as public scrutiny of business has grown. Both positions carry weight, yet I believe the two aims are ultimately complementary rather than opposed.
Those who champion profit argue that it is the engine of everything else a company achieves. Without healthy margins, firms cannot pay wages, fund research or survive downturns, and the jobs and tax revenue they generate already constitute a substantial social contribution. From this perspective, a business that neglects its finances in pursuit of lofty ideals risks collapsing and helping no one.
Conversely, advocates of corporate responsibility contend that profit pursued in isolation can inflict serious harm. Companies that pollute rivers, exploit workers or mislead consumers impose costs on society that never appear on their balance sheets. As citizens grow more values-driven, such conduct also invites boycotts and regulation, which damage the very profits that were prioritised.
In my opinion, the dichotomy is largely false. The most resilient enterprises recognise that treating employees fairly, limiting environmental damage and earning public trust are not charitable distractions but prudent investments that secure long-term returns. A firm that exhausts its workforce or alienates its community may post strong quarterly figures yet erode the foundations of its future. I therefore conclude that profit and responsibility, far from being rivals, reinforce one another, and that the wisest businesses pursue both in tandem.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay genuinely discusses both views before advancing a clear opinion that reframes the question ('the dichotomy is largely false'), satisfying every part of the discuss-both-views rubric.
- Coherence and Cohesion: contrast is managed smoothly through 'Conversely' and 'far from being rivals', while each body paragraph isolates one viewpoint for clarity.
- Lexical Resource: sophisticated phrasing such as 'healthy margins', 'values-driven' and 'prudent investments' shows controlled, formal lexis without overreaching.