Band 9 model answer
When a national team triumphs on the world stage, streets fill with celebrating crowds and a sense of shared identity surges. Whether this collective pride is wholesome or dangerous is debated, and I believe its value ultimately depends on the spirit in which it is expressed.
There is much to commend in sporting patriotism. A major victory can momentarily dissolve the divisions of class, region and politics, uniting strangers in common joy. Such moments remind citizens of what they share rather than what separates them, and the inspiration provided by national heroes can motivate young people and lift collective morale during difficult times. In this benign form, pride is a harmless and even healing emotion.
Yet the same fervour can curdle into something darker. When national identity becomes bound up with defeating rivals, sport may inflame hostility, stoke xenophobia and provoke the ugly tribalism witnessed in crowd violence. History shows how authoritarian regimes have exploited sporting triumphs as propaganda, manufacturing a false unity that masks genuine grievances. Pride, in such cases, shades into chauvinism and division rather than fellowship.
In my view, sport is neither inherently unifying nor inherently divisive; it merely amplifies the attitudes a society already holds. Where rivalry is good-natured and respect for opponents prevails, national pride is a wholesome force that binds communities together. The responsibility therefore lies with fans, media and leaders to celebrate success without descending into contempt for others, ensuring that pride remains a bridge between peoples rather than a wall.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both perspectives are explored with balance and the writer advances a thoughtful conditional thesis ('depends on the spirit in which it is expressed'), sustained throughout.
- Cohesion: the pivot 'Yet the same fervour can curdle' elegantly turns the argument, and the bridge/wall metaphor neatly closes the loop opened in the introduction.
- Lexical resource: emotive yet controlled diction such as 'curdle into something darker', 'stoke xenophobia' and 'shades into chauvinism' shows exceptional lexical precision.