Band 9 model answer
The global march of Western fast food, from burger chains to convenience-driven habits, has reached even the most traditional societies. Although this trend brings certain conveniences, I regard its overall impact as predominantly negative, chiefly because of its effects on public health and culinary heritage.
It would be unfair to deny the appeal of this lifestyle. Fast food is affordable, quick and consistent, qualities that suit the hurried routines of modern urban life. For busy families and workers, the convenience of a reliable, inexpensive meal is genuinely valuable, and the global restaurant industry also generates employment in many developing economies.
The drawbacks, however, are weightier. Diets dominated by calorie-dense, processed food have been linked to rising rates of obesity, diabetes and heart disease in countries that previously enjoyed healthier traditional cuisines. As fast food displaces home cooking, communities lose not only nutritional balance but also the culinary knowledge passed down through generations. The lifestyle that accompanies it, characterised by sedentary habits and constant consumption, compounds these health problems and quietly erodes distinctive food cultures, replacing varied regional dishes with a standardised, less nourishing alternative.
In conclusion, while the convenience and economic activity associated with Western fast food are real, they are outweighed by the serious harm it inflicts on physical health and cultural identity. In my assessment this is, on balance, a negative development, and governments would be wise to promote traditional diets and active lifestyles before the damage becomes entrenched.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay takes a clear evaluative stance ('predominantly negative') and sustains it, acknowledging positives but explicitly subordinating them to the stronger negatives in the conclusion.
- Coherence and Cohesion: the concessive-then-rebuttal structure ('It would be unfair to deny' followed by 'The drawbacks, however, are weightier') manages the evaluation transparently.
- Lexical Resource: health and food collocations such as 'calorie-dense, processed food', 'sedentary habits' and 'culinary heritage' show controlled, topic-relevant precision.