Band 9 model answer
In towns and cities everywhere, gifted local musicians, actors and painters find it increasingly difficult to earn a livelihood, while audiences flock to internationally famous names. This essay will explore why this imbalance arises and propose ways for communities to support the talent on their doorstep.
The chief reason is the global reach of modern media. Streaming platforms, social networks and international touring have created a small group of celebrities whose work is instantly available everywhere, crowding out lesser-known voices. Because audiences are drawn to what is familiar and widely praised, they spend their limited entertainment budgets on established stars, leaving local performers competing for scraps of attention. A further factor is perception: people often assume, mistakenly, that local equals amateur, undervaluing artists simply because they lack global fame.
Communities can counter these forces through deliberate, collective effort. Local authorities might offer affordable venues, grants and festivals that give homegrown talent a visible platform, while schools could expose children to nearby artists, nurturing both audiences and aspiration. Individuals, too, have a part to play by choosing to attend a neighbourhood gig or buy a painting from a regional artist rather than defaulting to the global brand.
Beyond formal schemes, a shift in attitude is essential. If residents took genuine pride in the creativity around them, supporting it would feel like an investment in their own identity rather than a charitable gesture. In conclusion, local artists struggle largely because globalised media privileges famous names, but through funding, education and a renewed sense of local pride, communities can ensure that their own performers not merely survive but thrive.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the two questions are addressed in clearly separated stages, with causes ('global reach', 'perception') preceding a range of community-level solutions, and the conclusion answers both.
- Coherence and Cohesion: cohesion is sustained through 'The chief reason', 'A further factor', 'too' and 'Beyond formal schemes', producing an argument that builds logically without overusing linkers.
- Lexical Resource: natural collocations and imagery such as 'on their doorstep', 'competing for scraps of attention' and 'defaulting to the global brand' lift the register above the formulaic.