Band 9 model answer
Millions devote substantial portions of their week to spectating rather than participating in sport. Whether this constitutes innocent relaxation or squandered time is a matter of perspective, and I believe the answer hinges on moderation.
Those who defend watching sport make a reasonable case. After demanding work, people deserve undemanding leisure, and following a beloved team provides relaxation, excitement and a welcome escape from daily pressures. Spectating is rarely a solitary act; it bonds friends and families, fuels lively conversation and fosters a sense of belonging to a wider community. Viewed this way, it is a harmless and genuinely enriching pleasure rather than wasted hours.
The opposing argument, however, carries weight when watching becomes excessive. Hours spent passively glued to a screen are hours not spent exercising, learning or nurturing relationships, and there is a certain irony in admiring athletes while neglecting one's own fitness. Taken to extremes, vicarious enjoyment can breed inactivity and even a vague dissatisfaction at living through the achievements of others instead of pursuing one's own.
In my view, watching sport is perfectly legitimate so long as it remains one pleasure among many rather than a substitute for an active life. A few hours enjoying a match is a wholesome reward that harms no one; sacrificing exercise, sleep and personal ambition to it is plainly unwise. The crucial distinction, therefore, lies not in the activity itself but in the balance it occupies within a person's wider life, and balance is something each individual must judge for themselves.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: both views are fairly represented and the writer commits to a clear, moderation-based opinion ('the answer hinges on moderation') consistent across the essay.
- Cohesion: the controlling idea of balance, introduced early and revisited in the conclusion, gives the response strong thematic unity and logical progression.
- Lexical resource: expressive phrasing such as 'squandered time', 'passively glued to a screen' and 'vicarious enjoyment' shows idiomatic, well-judged vocabulary.