Band 9 model answer
A familiar complaint among older citizens is that the young no longer show the deference their grandparents once took for granted. While I accept that the outward forms of respect have changed, I do not believe that genuine respect has truly declined; rather, it now expresses itself differently.
There is some superficial evidence for the traditional view. Young people today are more likely to challenge authority, question instructions and address elders informally, behaviours that can appear disrespectful to those raised in stricter times. The erosion of rigid hierarchies, encouraged by schools that prize independent thinking, means that obedience is no longer regarded as an automatic virtue.
Nevertheless, I would argue that this represents a shift in form rather than a loss of substance. Modern young people may speak more freely, yet they frequently demonstrate deep care for ageing relatives and a strong commitment to fairness across all ages. What earlier generations interpreted as respect was often mere submission to power; today's respect is more conditional, earned through demonstrated wisdom rather than granted by age alone. Several factors explain the change, chief among them greater equality, exposure to global ideas and the confidence that comes from education.
In conclusion, although the young undeniably treat their elders with less ceremonial formality than before, I do not regard this as a genuine decline in respect. It reflects a broader cultural move from automatic deference to respect that must be earned, a development that, on balance, seems healthy rather than alarming.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the essay answers both the 'do you think this is true' and 'reasons' components, taking the sophisticated position that respect has changed in form rather than declined.
- Coherence: the argument is structured around a clear concession-then-rebuttal pattern ('There is some superficial evidence... Nevertheless'), giving the reader a transparent line of reasoning.
- Lexical Resource: distinctions are drawn with precise lexis ('deference', 'submission to power', 'ceremonial formality', 'conditional'), allowing fine shades of meaning to be expressed.